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Akira Brahe according the Masters & Minions: The StarCorp Dossiers, Akira is dying of a disease. Thats why written up with death in it. At the time of the profile, says he has only months to live. -- [[User:Wrangler|Wrangler]] 18:54, 26 February 2010 (UTC) | Akira Brahe according the Masters & Minions: The StarCorp Dossiers, Akira is dying of a disease. Thats why written up with death in it. At the time of the profile, says he has only months to live. -- [[User:Wrangler|Wrangler]] 18:54, 26 February 2010 (UTC) | ||
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| + | This article, though well-cited and well-stocked with facts, is ''very'' rough to read. It probably needs the original Editor to fix some things (ex: "He tells he wants the officers who brought him to his attention that he hearted his place in Genyosha.") that cannot be understood by the available context. It reads as if a lot of facts were typed very quickly, with little-to-no self-editing done. It doesn't need to even be read aloud to realize that a lot of words are missing and rules of grammar violated. --[[User:Revanche|Revanche]] <sup>([[User_talk:Revanche|talk]]|[[Special:Contributions/Revanche|contribs]])</sup> 18:55, 26 February 2010 (UTC) | ||
Revision as of 14:55, 26 February 2010
Death
Akira Brahe according the Masters & Minions: The StarCorp Dossiers, Akira is dying of a disease. Thats why written up with death in it. At the time of the profile, says he has only months to live. -- Wrangler 18:54, 26 February 2010 (UTC)
Cleanup
This article, though well-cited and well-stocked with facts, is very rough to read. It probably needs the original Editor to fix some things (ex: "He tells he wants the officers who brought him to his attention that he hearted his place in Genyosha.") that cannot be understood by the available context. It reads as if a lot of facts were typed very quickly, with little-to-no self-editing done. It doesn't need to even be read aloud to realize that a lot of words are missing and rules of grammar violated. --Revanche (talk|contribs) 18:55, 26 February 2010 (UTC)