Talk:Task Force Serpent

First, this page desperately needs some grammatical clean up. I ran out of steam halfway through a preliminary overhaul. Second, I had a question about the claimed route taken by TFS (probably a result of the grammar):

"Task Force Serpent went along a route that brought them near the Outworld Alliance. They went on with a route, parallel to those commonly used by the clans."

Did TFS start way out by the OA? If so, how/when did TFS end up on the path parallel to the common Clan route to the Inner Sphere? That's way over toward the Lyran/Kuritan/FRR space from the OA.

Finally, is this entry really still a stub? --Cray 04:20, 11 February 2009 (PST)